The question was:
“Should official Christian teachings resist current secular views on gender” discuss
Students were given this question as homework. There were no time constraints and students were allowed to use their class notes to help. I believe that students need to first of all develop their technique before removing support (notes) and adding extra pressure of time conditions.
They are currently doing their first mock exam of the year (November 27th) under timed conditions, so have had three months of practicing their essay writing technique first. The students are allowed to use their revision packs for support. By March next year students will do a full exam with no notes and under timed conditions, so this is what we are working towards. If students don’t have the technique, removing notes and adding time pressure will not support them in improving their writing only aggravate the writing process.
These are three introductions for the essay (my comments can be seen at the end as footnotes):
Examples of main paragraphs: